雅思写作评分细则之6分的雅思作文分别是什么样的？

2018年11月12日19:51 来源：小站整理

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很多烤鸭同学苦于雅思写作无从写起，抑或词语匮乏，写出来的文章一点也不”高级“。但凡提到雅思写作，总能听到种种问题和苦恼。雅思写作究竟怎么写呢？其实最简单的办法便是”知己知彼“，”知己“代表要对自己的英语水平，弱项有清楚的认识，”知彼“代表要对雅思写作的评分点、评分标准细则有充分的了解。
本文让我们先来看一看”知彼“的部分。一起来了解基于雅思写作的评分细则，一篇被称为合格级别的6分雅思文章应该具有哪些要素。
TASK 2篇
6分雅思作文是这样的
TASK 2题目：
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

例文：
Nowadays, purpose of education being changed in Korea. There are some people who think that competition in children should be made, also others believe that children who are taught to co-operate as well as become more useful adults. There are advantages and disadvantages for both of the arguments.
点评：本段为开头段，首先提出话题，摆出世间的不同观点，引出下文的正反议论。
To begin with, what is good if a sense of competition in children is made? They could develop themselves more and more as they learn and study a lot to win from the competition. To prove this, in Korea, it is popular- even common now- to have a tutor who come to student’s house to teach extra pieces of study with paying a lot of money. They learn faster than what they learn at school. Furthermore, during the vocations, students study abroad to learn English for a month instead of revise school work. If they have experiments such as study abroad, it is one of the greatest plus point to go to the famous well-known high school. Moreover, there are four big school exam and two national examinations to test students’ level of studies. Generally, only the highest 40% can go to the good quality highschools and colleges children learn as much as they can, to win the competition to obtain good quality schools.

点评：详述让儿童竞争的好处，并给出相应的论据。

On the other hand, as they are busy to enter the schools and study individually with their own tutors, there are problems. They become selfish. They become careless and don’t help others a lot if it is about studies. There will be no co-operations for them. Then, why are there companies for many people to work in? each of them are clever, however, there are weak parts and strong parts for each person. To co-operate is to improve this part. People talk and listen to what others thinking of and learn. That could also be a great opportunity to learn instead of learning alone with one teacher.
点评：详述让儿童竞争的坏处，并给出相应的论据。
In conclusion, I strongly agree with that children should be taught to co-operate rather than compete. Nobody is perfect. People learn together, work together to develop each other. therefore, I want parents and teachers to educate children concentrating on co-operation, not compete and ranking them.
点评：结论段，首先重申自己的观点，并将前文的观点重新表述一下，最后提出自己的期待，结束全文。

总体评价：本文避免了讲大道理，避免了抽象，做到了简单而清晰，直接而晓畅。虽然思维稍显幼稚，语言也有不少重复生硬的地方，但把自己的思想说清楚了，因此很容易得到6分。
但是，从论证大主题的角度来说，这一篇的最后的收尾是co-operation更重要的成立的，但是这位考生在文字数量分配上缺乏规划，分配给competition的文字明显多于给co-operation的，这样就给了考官一个非常合情合理的借口扣分，
因此，如果你认同哪个观点，那就在这个观点上多写点吧。
以上就是基于雅思写作评分细则的6分雅思作文，希望能对同学们有帮助。
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