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【雅思大作文】考官也在用模板?9分雅思范文精心解密

编者按:这是一篇新鲜出炉的考官simon9分雅思大作文。以小编几十篇simon作文的阅读量,大致总结了他最为习惯的行文结构,通过对这个考官所喜欢的9分“模板”的解读,希望大家能在自己的雅思写作备考中,对写作模板的使用能有一个新的认识。

IELTS Writing Task 2: 'positive or negative' essay

Here's my full essay for the 'positive or negative development' question that we've been looking at over the last few weeks.

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

9分范文:

In recent years it has become far more normal for people to live alone, particularly in large cities in the developed world. In my opinion, this trend is having both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.

The rise in one-person households can be seen as positive for both personal and broader economic reasons. On an individual level, people who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members. A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills. From an economic perspective, the trend towards living alone will result in greater demand for housing. This is likely to benefit the construction industry, estate agents and a whole host of other companies that rely on homeowners to buy their products or services.

However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. Firstly, rather than the positive feeling of increased independence, people who live alone may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation and worry. They miss out on the emotional support and daily conversation that family or flatmates can provide, and they must bear the weight of all household bills and responsibilities. Secondly, from the financial point of view, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and rents. While this may benefit some businesses, the general population, including those who live alone, will be faced with rising living costs.

In conclusion, the increase in one-person households will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy.

(280 words, band 9)

【思路分析】四段13句式

1.导入段 2句(背景+观点)

2.主体段1 5句(观点+论据1+例子+论据2+支持句)

3.主题段2 5句(观点+论据1+支持句+论据2+支持句)

4.结论段 1句 观点重申

【模板解读】这是simon自己所最为擅长的雅思大作文四段13句式行文结构。几乎所有的大作文,均可以采用此结构完成。稍加变动的只是在主体段中的论据,支持二者的比重。一般来说,注意2个主体段中适时地加入1个例子即可。

所以对于一个主体段5句式,根据论据是2个还是3个(一般不允许1个,否则论证过于单薄)simon常常采取的方式是这样的:

方式1:观点+3个论据+1个支持句或例子(支持句或例子根据需要放置)

方式2:观点+2个论据+1个支持句+1个例子

小结:模板是可以用的,但这个模板指的是自己所擅长的一个总的文章结构,而不是具体的死板的句式结构。在这种擅长的结构中,加入自己对于topic的有见地的观点和论证过程,结果如上所示:280 words, band 9。

【文章解读】具体到文章内部,既平淡无奇,却又暗藏沟壑。

第一段的观点句this trend is having both positive and negative consequences in equal measure

第二段one-person households的同义转述,on an individual level和From an economic perspective两个层面的论述。learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget多动词形成的一种强大的表现力。

第三段观点句the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle 此种方式的观点句非常少见。作者为我们展示了对一个观点持完全中立态度的方法。从首段开始的in equal measure到此处的can be considered from the opposite angle。

第四段总结 have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy。

以上即是小站雅思频道为大家带来的9分雅思范文解读的全部内容。范文原载于simon博客。祝早日雅思写作学有所成,祝早日与雅思分手。


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