【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思大作文详解5：所谓幸福

2015年08月13日11:45 来源：小站教育作者：Phoebe

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Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天帮大家分析的这篇大作文出自剑桥雅思4，很多同学认为这道题目很难

Happiness is considered very important in life.Why is it difficult to define?What factors are important in achieving happiness?

首先，从题目可以看出，这是一篇非辩论类的关于happiness的作文，大家可能平时练习的比较少，缺乏写作素材，这里就帮大家带来很多来自Simon的Ideas：

� Happiness means different things to different people.

� It can be described as a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment.

� People enjoy spending time with family and friends.

� Hobbies, sports and games can be a source of fun and enjoyment.

� Some people see money as a source of happiness.

� Other people define happiness as something deeper.

� They need to feel that they are doing something useful with their lives.

� Some people get a sense of achievement from their work.

� Others find happiness in bringing up their children.

然后，和以往只有一个题目的大作文相比，这道题包含了两个问题，这种题型被Simon叫做two-part question，同时也给出了这种题型的4段式结构：

Use the following 4-paragraph essay structure for this kind of question:

1. Introduce the topic and give an overall answer to both questions

2. Answer the first question

3. Answer the second question

4. Conclude by summarising both answers

和我们前几期讲的大作文结构相比，主体段由Details变成了Answer questions，结尾再总结一下每个答案即可。开头的Introduction段落Simon建议写两句话，引入主题并做出简要回答。来看一下Simon是怎么写的：

It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.

大家可以看出，Simon一如既往地用了it is … that名型作为开篇第一句，第二句由while引导，前半句回答了第一个问题：很难定义，后半句引出第二个问题的回答：确实有获得快乐的的办法。

为什么快乐很难定义呢?这种抽象的问题让学生很伤脑筋，还是来看Simon是如何回答的吧：

Why is happiness difficult to define?

Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety of different ways.

Simon给出的原因非常convincing:由于个体差异，对快乐感知程度不同，定义则不同;快乐可以和多种感觉有关，如兴奋或平静。大家可以看到，Simon在做解释的时候，时刻不忘举例子，让回答变得更加具体，有说服力。所以小站老师也建议大家多在举例子方面下功夫。

现在贴出完整范文：

It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.

Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety of different ways.

Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of happiness, most people would agree that there are some basic preconditions to achieving it. Firstly, it is hard for a person to be happy if he or she does not have a safe place to live and enough food to eat. Our basic survival needs must surely be met before we can lead a pleasant life. Secondly, the greatest joy in life is usually found in shared experiences with family and friends, and it is rare to find a person who is content to live in complete isolation. Other key factors could be individual freedom and a sense of purpose in life.

In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because it is particular to each individual, but I believe that our basic needs for shelter, food and company need to be fulfilled before we can experience it.

(292 words, band 9)

最后来做词汇总结：

the majority of:其反义词组the minority of也要记牢

regard of:关于

individual:个体，个性

derive:重点词汇，在阅读中也很常见，常和step from/come from替换

a range of:重点词组，在听力中也极其常见，常和a variety of/a series of替换

今天先到这儿，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

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