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【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思大作文详解9:私立教育与公立教育

2015年08月18日16:11 来源:小站教育作者:Phoebe
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摘要:Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官,由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气,尤其是他亲笔写下的那些满分作文。今天小站的Phoebe老师又帮大家带来一篇Simon的大作文的详细解析,为同意与否题型,教育类话题,详情请见文章。

Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官,由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议,甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手,非常地道,言简意赅,和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比,着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文,所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华,相信大家都可以扔掉模板,写出高分作文!

【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思大作文详解9:私立教育与公立教育图1

今天要讲一篇Family Topic大作文。题目如下:

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

对于这种问你同意与否的作文,Simon做出如下指示:

If the question asks whether you agree or disagree, you need to make your opinion very clear. You can either have a strong opinion or a balanced opinion.

今天我们先来说一下如何写一篇Strong Opinion的作文。Simon说,When you have a strong opinion, you don't need to mention the opposite view. 是的,你没有看错,Simon说你若表达Strong Opinion,则无需提反方观点!现在开始写作文,按照前几期讲过的写作的顺序,第一步,Plan structure:

1. Introduction: 1 sentence to introduce the topic, 1 sentence to make your opinion clear (e.g. I completely disagree...)

2. Main paragraph: support your opinion with a reason

3. Main paragraph: support your opinion with another reason

4. Conclusion: repeat/summarise your opinion

第二步: brainstorm then organise

大家一起来头脑风暴the ideas for a “completely disagree” answer. 以下是Simon想到的Ideas:

� difficult to calculate the tax reduction

� more government staff would be required for this process

� we all pay for public services that we may not need e.g. police

� poorer people would pay more tax than wealthy people

� state schools benefit the whole of society

� high quality state education leads to equal opportunities for all

� a well-educated workforce is the key to a prosperous nation

� companies need educated staff

� we should all be happy to contribute to public services

头脑风暴之后,我们要将它们组织归纳成两个段落,从上面这些Ideas来看,似乎可以把它们分成两大主题:

1. Reasons why we think the idea would not work, or would be unfair.

2. Reasons why everyone should pay taxes that support state education.

在给出完整范文之前,再跟大家讲解一下Simon是如何建议大家规划整个大作文的写作时间的:

You have 40 minutes for writing task 2, and I suggest that you:

� Spend the first 10 minutes planning your essay structure and brainstorming ideas for the two main body paragraphs.

� Spend 5 minutes writing your 2-sentence introduction.

� Spend 20 minutes on the main body (10 minutes for each paragraph).

� Spend the last 5 minutes writing your conclusion and checking everything.

希望同学们在写今天的文章的时候都按照Simon的建议,平时练习的时候也养成定时写作文的好习惯,考场上也一定能发挥地游刃有余。

【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思大作文详解9:私立教育与公立教育图2

完整范文:

Some people believe that parents of children who attend private schools should not need to contribute to state schools through taxes. Personally, I completely disagree with this view.

For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to reduce taxes for families who pay for private education. Firstly, it would be difficult to calculate the correct amount of tax reduction for these families, and staff would be required to manage this complex process. Secondly, we all pay a certain amount of tax for public services that we may not use. For example, most people are fortunate enough not to have to call the police or fire brigade at any time in their lives, but they would not expect a tax reduction for this. Finally, if wealthy families were given a tax discount for sending their children to private schools, we might have a situation where poorer people pay higher taxes than the rich.

In my opinion, we should all be happy to pay our share of the money that supports public schools. It is beneficial for all members of society to have a high quality education system with equal opportunities for all young people. This will result in a well-educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation. Parents of children in private schools may also see the advantages of this in their own lives. For example, a company owner will need well qualified and competent staff, and a well-funded education system can provide such employees.

In conclusion, I do not believe that any financial concessions should be made for people who choose private education.

(269 words, band 9)

词汇总结:

tax reduction: 削减税收

fire brigade: 消防局

well-educated: 受良好教育的

concession: 妥协

well-funded: 资金充裕的

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