【9分作文盛宴】simon考官华丽雅思大作文详解17：改善城市居住环境
- 2016年03月03日14:22 来源：小站教育作者：小站雅思编辑
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Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天带来一篇大作文，题目如下：
More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?
这是一篇Problem and solution类型的大作文。首先在写作文之前，Simon让大家先思考4个问题：
· Can you see why we call this a "problem and solution" question?
· Which words are used instead of "problem" and "solution"?
· How can we write a 2-sentence introduction for this question?
· What ideas do you have for the main paragraphs?
第一， 你知道为什么我们将这种作文称作"problem and solution"类型吗?
第二， 哪些单词可以用来替换 "problem" and "solution"?
第三， 对于这种题目，如何写出一个两句话的开头段落呢?
第四， 对于主体段的内容，你有什么想法?
每次在写作文之前呢，大家都要养成勤于思考的习惯，看到一个作文题目，就要主动地去联想这个话题下的一些可写的内容，头脑风暴练习久了自然就不愁作文没话可写了。
接下来，Simon给出这篇作文的大致写作框架和内容：
Essay structure and ideas:
1. Introduction: introduce the topic, then give a general answer
2. Difficulties: cost of living, unemployment, stress, traffic congestion, pollution
3. Solutions: social housing, reduce migration by improving small towns and the rural economy, improve public transport, fewer cars
4. Conclusion: repeat / summarise
文章框架和内容：
第一段，引入主题，然后给出回答。
第二段，可以写入文章的在城市居住的困难有居住成本，失业，压力，交通阻塞，污染等
第三段，解决方案有住廉租房，通过提高小城镇和边远地区经济来减少人中迁徙，改善公共交通，减少车辆等
结尾段，重复并总结
从Simon给的文章段落结构可以看出，他还是一贯地用了四段式的写法，每段的内容也都分工明确，逻辑清晰，同学们可以多加学习。然后Simon还给出了他的开头段：
Introduction:
Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant.
Simon还是保持了开头段只用两句话的写作方法，虽然只有两句话，但是足够起到了引入主题和给出答案的作用。这种言简意赅的写作方法是备受雅思写作考官喜欢的一种开头段写法，各位考生今后练习的时候应该多多尝试。
话不多说，接下来送给大家考官满分范文：
Here's my full sample essay for question below.
More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?
Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant.
The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.
However, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major cities.
In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.
(273 words, band 9)
以上就是今天考官范文的分析讲解，希望对大家有所帮助!祝各位都能考出理想的写作分数!
