2017年4月29日雅思写作考试真题范文：孩子注意力问题
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本周雅思写作话题：Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their study in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?
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孩子们为什么不能专心学习?原因无非就是内因和外因。外因很容易找到，网络游戏的干扰，电视节目的干扰，或者课本太枯燥无聊等等，内因也容易发现，比如现在有很多宣传，不需要读书也能成功，这样孩子们就没有学习的动力了。解决办法也很简单、直接，比如控制孩子们使用网络的时间，同时告诉孩子们读书的重要性(即使不能挣钱，也能让你的生活更充实和幸福)。按照这样的逻辑写，轻松愉快，烤鸭需要注意的就剩下控制语言错误，控制模板使用，尽量体现出自己的写作个性来。
7分参考范文
Students ought to spend most of their time on the school work, but nowadays it is not uncommon that students are simply not able to put their heart to study.
(1) 本段是开头段，使用的开门见山法，直接提出现象，但在用词上并不照抄题目，而是体现出变化。
(2) It is not uncommon that... ......并不罕见
(3) Put one’s heart to... 集中精力做......
There could be two reasons why this happens. First, today the students are surrounded by so many distractions that they gradually find that learning is too boring and uninteresting. While students two decades ago had nearly no choice but sit in the classroom and read books, students today have easy and fast access to Internet, on which they can do almost all things. For instance, they can play computer games, watch videos, search for any information they need, and chat with their friends, to mention just a few. So, having been used to this kind of“easy” online life, many young people simply cannot put their heart into the more serious and consuming school work.
(1)本段分析学生不喜欢学习的第一个理由，也是浅层次的外部理由：学生因为外部干扰(尤其是互联网的干扰)而讨厌学习。本段的论证思路是：学生发现学习无趣--比较今天的学生和20年前的学生--举例今天的学生可以在网上做什么--上网的结果就是不愿意再认真学习。注意与这个思路匹配的是一些常用句型。比如：while...; so, having done..., they...
(2)Distraction: 干扰
(3)Access：进入;使用
(4)To name just a few：如此等等;诸如此类
(5)Consuming 耗费的(比如time-consuming耗时的;energy-consuming耗能量的)
Another important factor that affects the students' attitude towards their school work is that a good education seems not as important as before. For quite a long time, receiving a good education was the only way for young people to get a decent job and earn a high salary. But now, this is apparently not the case any more. Influenced by business stars like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, many young people now begin to believe that one’s success does not have much to do the education s/he receives. The students, therefore, are not motivated enough to focus on their learning.
(1)本段讨论学生不喜欢学习的另一个原因，也是更深层次的内在原因：学生不再相信只有受教育才能成功了。本段的论证思路是：主题句--以前的情况--现在的情况--结论。在论证的过程中，顺便举出一些例子，可以展示考生的知识面，同时增强作文的个性化。
(2)Factor 因素
(3)Decent 体面的
(4)Apparently 表面看地;明显地
(5)Motivated 有动力的
As education of the young is so important to the future of the world, we ought to find ways out of this embarrassing situation. For example, the school and parents should work together to set limitson the time children spend online. Internet is a good great invention, yet obsession with it will certainly reduce the time that should have been put to more serious work. Besides, young people should be made to understand that life is not just about making money, but about having rich and colorful experience and education is the best gateway to that rewarding life. (349 words)
(1)本段针对前面两个原因提出解决方案。本段论证思路是：需要找到解决办法--第一个办法是限制学生上网时间--过多上网的坏处--第二个办法是让学生明白读书的意义是拥有更丰富精彩的生活。
(1) Embarrassing 令人尴尬的
(2) Set limits on... 给......设限
(3) Obsession (with) 沉迷(于......)
(4) Gateway 通路
(5) Rewarding 有回报的;有价值的
