雅思写作十大失败开头总结及修改

2018年03月28日13:40 来源：小站整理

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如今雅思考试人数不断攀升，相对竞争也越来越激烈，打分越来越严格。雅思写作分数不高，怪雅思写作考官压分？你的雅思作文到底是打动雅思考官的雅思高分作文还是气死雅思写作考官的低分作文，经验丰富的雅思写作考官从开头就能一眼识别你的雅思写作功底。关于雅思写作高分技巧，各位考鸭一定看了很多，对比自己的雅思作文，还是看不出自己低分的原因？你的雅思写作没有进步空间了吗？那不如反过来，看一些雅思写作失败案例吧。

雅思写作失败开头一：考官不吃中式客气这套

典型失败案例1：Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

修改方案：关于写作话题还是开门见山，直奔主题吧。In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。

Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思写作真题)

Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection.Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!

雅思写作失败开头二：中式英语表达

典型失败案例：Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life.In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

Topic 2- The population problem.The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

Topic 3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person.Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”.

雅思写作失败开头三：观点模糊不明

典型失败案例： Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little,only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

雅思写作失败开头四：开头就跑题

典型失败案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire thequalifications and quality essential to success through university education. Towhat extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思写作真题)

I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To havethese important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English,music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

雅思写作失败开头五：语法错误

典型失败案例：Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished? (雅思写作真题)

About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

雅思写作失败开头六：没有重点的开头

典型失败案例：Topic-The importance of environmental protection

This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

雅思写作失败开头七：用词不当，表意不明

典型失败案例：Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

雅思写作失败开头八：重复和啰嗦要不得

典型失败案例：Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. Andit is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimesharmful to our society.

雅思写作失败开头九：不严谨的中式谚语

典型失败案例：Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?

I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……

正确说法：Happiness lies in having many children

Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?

We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……

Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

I believe one sentence: “A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.

雅思写作失败开头十： 观点片面

典型失败案例：Topic1-The importance of confidence

In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All thesuccessful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people whodon’t have confidence, they all have failed.

Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem

I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obeythe traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’msure there will be no traffic problem any more.

以上就是10大雅思写作失败开头，除了从优秀的雅思写作范文中学习雅思写作的技巧外，在雅思写作复习备考中，各位考鸭也需要不断从自己的雅思作文中找到不足，及时纠正。考期临近，各位考鸭们加油。