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7月28日雅思写作范文分享-小站原创

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摘要:7月28日雅思大作文范文新鲜出炉,不知考鸭事先有没有准备到这道话题。范文原创自小站老师Emily.Fan。本次写作考的是犯罪类与教育类相结合的话题,旧题一道,讨论已做了好公民的的前犯人是否是教育青少年关于犯罪的危害性的最好人选。小站范文,4段式,265词。

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students about the danger of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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7月28雅思写作话题分析

属于犯罪类话题;具体涉及到预防青少年犯罪的层面。考生在答题时需要注意题干中限定词 “the best”。若采取不同意的态度,则可以先承认其合理之处,但是有其他合适的人选。在写作过程中,犯罪类词汇表达也可能是考生存在的一个难点,因此平时务必注重该类话题词汇的积累。

P1:改写背景信息且表明自己的态度。

P2:论述成为好公民的罪犯可以告知学生犯罪的危害但他们不是最佳人选。

P3:论述其他可以教育学生犯罪的危害的人选。

P4:总结并表明自己的观点

雅思写作范文:

Those rehabilitated ex-convicts are the best persons who could educate students on the severe consequence of perpetrating a crime, as some people argue. As far as I am concerned, I disagree with this viewpoint.

Admittedly, the former prisoners’ painful experience does serve the purpose well. The depression of being sentenced and punished as well as the torment of being isolated from society act as a deterrent to prevent teenagers from engaging in criminal wrongdoing, whereas those people are not the most suitable ones considering the fact that their stories are merely relevant to their personal sufferings rather than a comprehensive law education.

In this scenario, officials of law enforcement department and judge of the court are supposed to assist students in building up the awareness of abiding by the laws. Lawyers, for instance, are far more knowledgeable about the line between legal and illegal, imparting the common law concept to juveniles so as to stop them breaking laws due to ignorance. As for the judges, who are equipped with expertise in trial and arbitration, can emphasize the coercive power of law and the principle of equality under the law in order to eliminate adolescents’ idea of getting off. Therefore, it is indispensable to have both of them for school legal education.

In conclusion, even if the stories told by ex-prisoners have a deterrent impact on children who are curious about committing offences, I object to inviting them to educate students in school. From my perspective, experts dealing with law cases and sentences play a more significant role in helping children realize the danger of crimes.

雅思写作犯罪类词汇:

rehabilitated恢复的;复原的  convict 囚犯 perpetrate a crime犯罪  be sentenced 被判决

torment折磨(精神) act as a deterrent 作为一个威慑物  criminal wrongdoing犯罪行为

in this scenario 在这种情况下 law enforcement department执法部门 abide by遵守

the line between legal and illegal合法与非法的界限 ignorance无知 expertise in专长于

trial审判 arbitration仲裁 the coercive power of law法律的强制性

the principle of equality under the law法律的公平性 get off逃脱(刑罚)

have a deterrent impact on对。。。有威慑作用  …, as some people argue 非限定定语从句

..., imparting …现在分词作结果状语 considering the fact that,…原因状语从句引导词

范文原创自小站老师Emily.Fan 265 words

范文再好,好不过自己动手练习,动口动手永远是语言学习的唯一通道。更多雅思写作范文,尽在小站雅思频道,祝2018年雅思写作轻松上七。

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