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剑桥雅思10作文范文启示录之3.5分范文

编者按:剑桥雅思真题系列一直是雅思考试未来发展的风向标,那么,2015年的我们又怎么能错过对剑桥雅思10的解读呢?本文先从低分范文开始,重点解读写作评分未来发展趋势,教烤鸭们的自动升级写作系统。


首先,简单说一下,剑10Test2(3.5分范文)给我们的启示。曾几何时,在剑4,剑5,剑6和剑9中也都出现过写作最低分4分,其中考官的基本评语都是,为完成任务,逻辑混乱,词汇不足,语法程度差总体表意不明。而同样水平的作文到现在也就只能拿到3.5分。不过这个分数对于绝大多的烤鸭来说并没有参考价值。而另一篇5.5分的作文才更适合绝大多数的中国烤鸭的程度。因为5.5分到6分,或者6.5分上7分始终都是一个难以逾越的鸿沟。

那我们马上开始新版5.5分的评分标准,一下是考官评语中的关键词,方便我们快速把握“尺度”:

1. only 219——字数不够

2. address all parts of the prompt——回答完问题

3. presents a relevant position——立场相关(没有跑题)

4. ideas could be more fully extended——理由可以更充分

5. arranged coherently——信息连贯

6. a clear overall progression——总体论证清晰

7. the vocabulary is generally adequate and appropriate——词汇基本够用且基本准确

8. meaning is generally clear——表意基本清楚

9. fairly frequent errors——语法错误频繁

10. rarely impede communication——很少阻碍交流

11. grammar and punctuation are fairly well controlled语法和标点控制得当

以上评语全部总结下来可以说两个字——“generally clear”,而同样水平的文章在剑5的年代还是可以拿到6分的,具体内容请鸭鸭们参考剑5书后P167页范文可知。我们似乎可以得出这样的结论:现在的雅思写作评分比原来苛刻0.5分,而这0.5分正是我们以上提到的难以逾越的那一部分鸿沟,虽然渺小但是非常致命。

不过,在上述评分标准中我们不难整理出现代烤鸭应该具备的写作实力:

1. 二百五十字数饱——胡编乱造不讨巧

2. 完整回答不能少——具体展开提纲好

3. 立场鲜明不跑题——题干中把关键找

4. 充分论证不可少——原因解释和例子

5. 信息连贯很重要——句与句间连词好

6. 段落完整有必要——先思考完再落笔

7. 用词准确又灵活——老外范文不可少

8. 表达意图需明确——句子翻译勤练习

9. 减少错误6分保——老师指导效果好

10. 文章读懂无障碍——伙伴评价办法好

11. 标点问题不算大——没有障碍是最好

最后给大家呈现5.5分考生原文,请鸭鸭们根据以上评分标准,找到该考生的错误指出,看看自己能否改正过来,或者是不是也正好是你现在的问题。

Museums are unique places where you get to experience the history from past to the latest technology. However, admission is required when entering.

Museums are popular places to go to on a weekends with family or friends. Admissions(“入场费”不可数) are one of the funds which keeps(keep) the museum running and also to maintain its exibits(exhibits:“h”不发音). Without admission museums would be dirty, pourly(pooly) maintained, and likely impossible to operate, unless funded from goverment(gover“n”ment=govern+ment) or charity.

However admissions are (不可数admission is)one thing which may keep the customer(+s复数) from entering. Usually we have to pay around $30 for admissions(去掉s). Children or family which doesn’t earn much simply can not(cannot无空格) afford such (+an) amount. They will go to museum which is free or even not go and experience the greatness of the museum, which I think is horrible because it should be open for everyone.

I think having an(去掉) admission is a disadvantage since museums should be open for everyone, but admissions are essential for running the museums. So I think it is very important to come up with a plan so that museums could (+not only)be operated but also be admission free(?表意不清), such as goverment funding or doing a charity(为保持结构一致,改成charity donating). Auckland Museum is one great example. It is one of the biggest museums in New Zealand but it is also free of admission since it’s(its) government funded.

小站雅思频道提醒:现在鸭鸭们有没有更明确这篇文章为什么给5.5分,而有着5.5以上或者6分梦想的你,是不是也看到未来努力的方向——降低简单语法的错误率,提高基础词汇拼写准确率。那么当务之急就是要训练自己的写作速度和语言的准确度,留出2~3分钟检查这些弱弱的语法和词汇错误吧!

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