【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思大作文详解14：拯救濒危语言

2015年08月25日17:51 来源：小站教育作者：Phoebe: 参与（0）阅读（7142）

摘要：Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气，尤其是他亲笔写下的那些满分作文。今天小站的Phoebe老师又帮大家带来一篇Simon的大作文的详细解析，关于拯救濒危语言，讨论观点题型。详情请见文章。

Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！

今天带来一篇大作文，题目如下：

Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

在写作之前，先跟大家讲一下首尾段的写作技巧，以下是Simon的总结和范例：

Here is a review of my advice for task 2 introductions:(introdution段落写法总结)

· Make the introduction short and do it quickly. The main body paragraphs are more important.(首段要简短，快速完成，主体段才是最重要的)

· Two sentences are enough: 1) introduce the topic. 2) give a basic answer to the question.(两句话足够了：一句引入主题，一句对问题给出基本作答)

Example question:

All high school students should be encouraged to take part in community service programmes.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

My introduction:

Some people believe that high school students would benefit from doing unpaid work in their local communities. I completely agree that community service programmes for teenagers are a good idea.

总结：虽然只有两句话，Simon用了大量的同义替换，避免重复，短小精悍，值得借鉴。

Several people have asked me about conclusions for IELTS Writing Task 2. The main body paragraphs are much more important, so don't worry too much about the conclusion; make it short, simple and fast.(尾段同样不如主体段重要，也要做到简短，快速完成)

Here are some example conclusion phrases for different types of question(以下是四种不同类型大作文的尾段写法):

1. Opinion

For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that... (+ repeat your opinion).

2. Discussion (+ Opinion)

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against... (topic), but I believe that... (if the question asks for your opinion).

3. Advantages and Disadvantages

In conclusion, I would argue that the benefits of... (topic) outweigh the drawbacks.

4. Problem and Solution

In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for... (topic), and steps need to be taken to tackle this problem.

总结：不同类型的大作文要用不同句型的结尾，这样才能确保总结到位。

接下来大家按照Simon的指示写一下今天的作文，写好对照范文。

完整范文：

It is true that some minority languages may disappear in the near future. Although it can be argued that governments could save money by allowing this to happen, I believe that these languages should be protected and preserved.

There are several reasons why saving minority languages could be seen as a waste of money. Firstly, if a language is only spoken by a small number of people, expensive education programmes will be needed to make sure that more people learn it, and the state will have to pay for facilities, teachers and marketing. This money might be better spent on other public services. Secondly, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for countries to have just one language. Governments could cut all kinds of costs related to communicating with each minority group.

Despite the above arguments, I believe that governments should try to preserve languages that are less widely spoken. A language is much more than simply a means of communication; it has a vital connection with the cultural identity of the people who speak it. If a language disappears, a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversity that makes societies more interesting. By spending money to protect minority languages, governments can also preserve traditions, customs and behaviours that are part of a country’s history.

In conclusion, it may save money in the short term if we allow minority languages to disappear, but in the long term this would have an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage.

(258 words)

词汇总结：

preserve: 保存，保护

facility: 设施

extremely: 极其地

in the long term: 长期来看

今天先到这儿，下期见！

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