2017年5月6日雅思大作文真题范文:青少年犯罪
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Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?青少年犯了重罪，比如抢劫，暴力袭击，应该像成年人一样被惩罚，你的观点？
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It is argued that, when a teenager commits a crime, even a serious crime such as robbery or sexual molestation, he should not be given the same punishment as an adult criminal. Instead of being put into prison, as these people would suggest, the young criminal should be ordered to do some community services so that they can learn from their mistakes. Quite contrary to this popular belief, I think all criminals, no matter how young they are, should be put into jail and how long they should stay there depends on the severity of their crime.
(1)开头段引出话题和观点。
(2)It is argued that... 有人认为......
(3)Instead of 不是......
(4)Quite contrary to this popular belief... 与这个普遍观点相反的是......
(5)Depend on 取决于......
Firstly, prison is a good place for young people to think again what wrong they have done to other people. When put into jail, the young people will have little to do but read and think about their past. There are also many people who will help the young people understand why what they have done before is not socially acceptable. In this way, these young criminals will have a better chance to come back to normal life. On the contrary, if they are just ordered to community services, they may very likelyend up repeating their mistakes.
(1)本段讨论原因一：监狱是青少年罪犯反思的好地方。注意论证逻辑：监狱是让年轻犯人思考的好地方--监狱里，他们有时间学习和思考--监狱里还有人帮助他们认识到错误--这样，他们就有机会重新回归正常--如果不这样，他们可能重蹈覆辙。【是不是很简单清晰的论证逻辑?】
(2)When put into prison, the young people will have nothing to do but read and think about their past. 这句中的put into prison是过去分词短语，做时间状语。如果写成这样也是可以的：When they are put into prison, the young people will...
(3)Come back to normal life 回归正常生活
Secondly, for these young criminals, their experience in prison may help prevent them fromcommitting more crimes. Once they have been put into jail, they will never forget this experience. So, next time when they think of doing anything wrong, their memory of the prison will immediately return and then they may stop. The memory of doing community services, I believe, does not have this function.
(1)本段讨论原因之二：监狱经历对年轻犯人的心理影响。
(2)commit more crimes 犯更多罪行
(3)Think of doing... 想做......
Therefore, my opinion is that, like an adult law violator, the teenager should also go to prison he commits serious crimes because this experience in prison may enable them to become a better person. Other forms of punishment may be useful, yet I do not think they are as effective as prison.
(1)本段为结论段，重申观点。
(2)Law violator 犯法的人
(3)enable them to do...使他们能够做......
