Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天来讲一篇小作文。题目如下：
The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
有同学在遇到图表中含有国家的时候，不知道是否该写出具体的国家名字，来看一下Simon的建议：
A few things to remember when the graph or chart shows countries:
1. If the question doesn't name the countries (e.g. "in three countries"), you could name them in your introduction (e.g. "in Britain, France and Germany"). You could even write "in three countries, namely Britain, France and Germany".(如果问题中不含国家名字，你要在introduction段落中写出国家名字，如…in three countries, namely Britain, France and Germany.)
2. Don't forget the word "the" when writing about "the USA" and "the UK".(在写USA和UK的时候别忘了加the)
3. Always compare the countries; never describe the figures for each country in separate paragraphs.(总是比较各个国家，永远不要用一整个段落去描述一个国家)
Finally, try to vary the way you write about countries.(尝试用多种方式去写作) For example:
· The number of elderly people in the USA rose.
· Canada also saw a rise in the number of elderly people.
· However, the figure for Australia fell.
现在大家已经非常清楚图表中含有国家的时候该如何表达了吧!现在说回这道题目，根据Simon提供的以下写作素材，这篇小作文应该可以很容易写出来：
Some paraphrasing that you could use in your introduction:
- annual expenditures = yearly spending
- cell phone services = mobile phones
- residential services = landline phones
Two possible main points for your overview / summary:
- compare the two trends over the whole period
- say what happened in 2006
Select key details:
- compare the figures for 2001
- describe the changes in expenditure over the following 5 years
- give the figures for 2006 (where the two lines meet)
- finish with a comparison of spending in 2010
完整范文：
The line graph compares average yearly spending by Americans on mobile and landline phone services from 2001 to 2010.
It is clear that spending on landline phones fell steadily over the 10-year period, while mobile phone expenditure rose quickly. The year 2006 marks the point at which expenditure on mobile services overtook that for residential phone services.
In 2001, US consumers spent an average of nearly $700 on residential phone services, compared to only around $200 on cell phone services. Over the following five years, average yearly spending on landlines dropped by nearly $200. By contrast, expenditure on mobiles rose by approximately $300.
In the year 2006, the average American paid out the same amount of money on both types of phone service, spending just over $500 on each. By 2010, expenditure on mobile phones had reached around $750, while the figure for spending on residential services had fallen to just over half this amount.
(162 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
在看完范文之后，有同学可能会问，这里面出现了4次Expenditure，这样是不是不太好？来看看Simon的回答：
The answer is no! If you look at the graph, you can see that the whole essay must be about expenditure. In fact, I needed to mention the idea of expenditure eleven times! Does the examiner really expect you to think of eleven synonyms for "expenditure"? Of course not.(Simon说，整篇作文都和expenditure有关，按理说此单词需要被提及11次呢!考官会期待你写出它的11个同义词吗？当然不了！)
It's impossible to avoid repeating some of the key words in writing task 1. Try to add variety where you can (I also used "spending", "spent" and "paid out"), but don't become obsessed with this. The important thing is to describe and compare the data.(你不可能在小作文中避免重复关键词的。只能尽量用spending, spent, paid out来替换。但是不必纠结于此。小作文最重要的事情是描述数据。)
今天先到这儿，希望对大家有所帮助，下期见！
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