【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思小作文详解16：流程图

2015年08月26日15:35 来源：小站教育作者：Phoebe: 参与（0）阅读（8000）

摘要：Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气，尤其是他亲笔写下的那些满分作文。今天小站的Phoebe老师又帮大家带来一篇Simon的小作文的详细解析，今天是一篇关于蜜蜂生命周期的流程图题型。

Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！

今天要讲的是小作文。在写作之前先讲一下时态的问题。

Simon说，Several people have asked me how to write about future years on a graph or chart. For example, what tense should you use if the graph shows the year 2025?有人问他如何描述图表上未来的年份，比如，图表上显示2025年的信息，应该用什么时态呢？

Simon给出了一组对去时和将来时的比较，大家注意看划线部分词语的转换：

Past:

In 1999, the proportion of people using the Internet in the USA was about 20%. The figures for Canada and Mexico were lower, at about 10% and 5% respectively. In 2005, Internet usage in both the USA and Canada rose to around 70% of the population, while the figure for Mexico reached just over 25%.

Future (I've changed the years and the verbs):

In 2015, the proportion of people using the Internet in the USA is expected to beabout 20%. The figures for Canada and Mexico are likely to be lower, at about 10% and 5% respectively. In 2025, it is predicted that Internet usage in both the USA and Canada will rise to around 70% of the population, while the figure for Mexico should reach just over 25%.

另外，在上一期的小作文，大家是否有注意第二段的时态，是这样写的：

It is clear that the largest proportion of consumer spending in each country went on food, drinks and tobacco. On the other hand, the leisure/education category has the lowest percentages in the table.

所以呢，对于图表中发生在过去的信息，描述的时候要用过去时;但是拿图表中的数据互相做对比的时候，就要用现在时了。这个细节值得大家注意。

关于时态就说这么多，今天来写个流程图吧，题目如下：

The diagram shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

完整范文：

The diagram illustrates the various stages in the life of a honey bee. We can see that the complete life cycle lasts between 34 and 36 days. It is also noticeable that there are five main stages in the development of the honey bee, from egg to mature adult insect.

The life cycle of the honey bee begins when the female adult lays an egg; the female typically lays one or two eggs every 3 days. Between 9 and 10 days later, each egg hatches and the immature insect, or nymph, appears.

During the third stage of the life cycle, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times. This moulting first takes place 5 days after the egg hatches, then 7 days later, and again another 9 days later. After a total of 30 to 31 days from the start of the cycle, the young adult honey bee emerges from its final moulting stage, and in the space of only 4 days it reaches full maturity.

(169 words, band 9)

今天先到这儿，下期见！

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