Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天来看一篇小作文。题目如下：
The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
写作之前，可能有同学会问小作文都有哪些common mistakes，又该如何避免呢?帮大家带来一些Simon的非常棒的建议：
Here's some advice to help you avoid common mistakes in IELTS writing task 1:
1. Don't copy the question for your introduction. You should paraphrasethe question (i.e. rewrite it using some different words).(introduction段落不可以照抄问题。你要用不同的词汇去复述)
2. Don't forget to separate your paragraphs clearly.(别忘了要清晰划分段落)
3. Don't forget to write a good summary/overview of the information. A quick one-sentence conclusion is not good enough. I prefer to put the overview straight after the introduction, and I try to write 2 sentences describing the information in general. You won't get a high score if you don't write a good overview.(别忘了写一个好的summary/overview段落，一句不够，要写两句。不写是得不了高分的!)
4. Don't describe items separately (e.g. 2 lines on a graph). You should always try to compare things if it is possible to do so. Instead of describing 2 lines separately, compare the 2 lines at key points.(别分开描述，要互相比较着描述。如两条线的话要比较关键点。)
5. Don't try to describe every number on a chart or graph (unless there are only a few numbers). A key skill in task 1 is being able to choosethe key information and describe or compare it well. I usually mention around 6 or 7 numbers in my main paragraphs.(除非数字很少，否则别描述每一个数字。小作文的重要技巧之一是能够选择重要信息并描述或比较。我一般会写6~7个数字在主体段)
6. Don't spend longer than 20 minutes on task 1. Practise spending 5 minutes on each of your 4 paragraphs. Stop yourself after 20 minutes; remember that task 2 is worth more marks.(别花超过20分钟在小作文上。尝试去练习五分钟四段中的每一段。在20分钟时停下来;记住大作文分数比重更大。)
接下来大家按照Simon的指示完成今天的作文，然后和范文比照！
完整范文：
The three bar charts show average years of schooling, numbers of scientists and technicians, and research and development spending in developing and developed countries. Figures are given for 1980 and 1990.
It is clear from the charts that the figures for developed countries are much higher than those for developing nations. Also, the charts show an overall increase in participation in education and science from 1980 to 1990.
People in developing nations attended school for an average of around 3 years, with only a slight increase in years of schooling from 1980 to 1990. On the other hand, the figure for industrialised countries rose from nearly 9 years of schooling in 1980 to nearly 11 years in 1990.
From 1980 to 1990, the number of scientists and technicians in industrialised countries almost doubled to about 70 per 1000 people. Spending on research and development also saw rapid growth in these countries, reaching $350 billion in 1990. By contrast, the number of science workers in developing countries remained below 20 per 1000 people, and research spending fell from about $50 billion to only $25 billion.
(187 words)
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