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雅思写作精简之道 长难句请绕路

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摘要:雅思写作的要诀在于simple and clear,可惜大多数同学不理解,因为他们接受到的指导更多的是:你的用词太低级了,你的句式太单调了。当然不是说简单明了的写作方式很简单,其实一点都不简单。不过疯狂堆料,加上那些自己都没理顺的高分词汇,句型就完全是误解了雅思写作。

雅思写作拿高分不易,因为用文字清晰完整地讨论一个问题本来就不易,更不用提要用英语来书写。很多Ieltser被灌输了高难词汇句型再套点模板的一整套捷径写作思路。所以,要紧牙关背了若干高难度的词汇和长难句,一到考试就忍不住要塞进去。结果让文章的可读性和基本的表达准确性很低。佶屈聱牙!

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下面就来看一些例子,体会一些写得并不成功的长句和如何修改的建议:

雅思写作精简建议一:避免空洞的单词和词组

1.一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关或重要的信息,完全可以删掉。

比如:When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:

Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换。

例如:Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.

雅思写作精简建议二:避免重复

1.尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。

例如下面这个例子:The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.

large对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.

更简洁的表达方式为:

My grandfather grew up on a large farm.

2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换。

例如:My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm.

这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm.

雅思写作精简建议三:选择最恰当的语法结构

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中最重要的意思。

例如:The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构。

例如下面的句子:There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.

可以改为:

My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.

更简洁的句式为:

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

3.把从句改为短语或单词。

例如:Dairy cows were raised on the farm,which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an areathat was remote.

简介的表达方式为:

The dairy farm was located in a remotearea, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。

例如:In the fall, not only did the cows haveto be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather'sfamily.

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-mygrandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态後,彷佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

In the fall, my grandfather's family notonly milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语。

例如:My grandfather didn't have time tostand around doing nothing with his school friends.

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:

My grandfather didn't have time toloiter with his school friends.

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达。

例如:Profits from the farm were not large.Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They werenot sufficient to pay for a university degree.

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

Profits from the farm were sometimes toosmall to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.

以上就是小编为大家带来的《雅思写作精简之道 长难句请绕路》的全部内容,无论用词还是造句,首求清晰,再求准确,至于什么高分词长难句,那是表词达意的需求下自然出现的,而非刻意为之!左手剑桥雅思系列,右手小站雅思频道,2018屠鸭不在话下。

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